英検2級17年度第3回のライティング問題ですが、以下解答だと何点くらいになるのでしょうか? TOPIC Some people say that the number of cars in cities should be limited.Do you agree with this idea? POINTS Convenience Public safety The environment
解答 I think that the number of cars in cities should not be limited. There are two reasons. First of all, if number of cars limits, car companies can not sell its cars and the economy will be decreasing. Also, today, cars technology is being increasing, so spending gas is decreasing. Because of all the reasons above, I think that the number of cars in cities should not be limited.
解答 I believe that the number of cars in cities should not be limited. There are two reasons. First of all, if the number of cars is limited, car companies cannot sell their cars and it will damage the economy. Also, today, the car technology has been improved, so large amounts of gasoline is not wasted. Because of all the reasons above, I believe that the number of cars in cities should not be regulated.
>>606 2つしか理由はないのに、first of all なんて書き方をするのか? the number of cars is limited, なんて書いてるけど、どういう意味なんだろ? 車の数を限るというのはどう限るの? 車会社が売ってもいい台数の制限をうけるのか? それとも、この世にある車台数を政府が 数えて、ランダムに廃棄車を指定するのか? the car technology has been improved と受け身にしなくても the car technology has improved でいいんじゃないの? so large amounts of gasoline is not wasted. not wastedじゃなくてこれ、ガソリン消費が 減っているというだけでしょ。 そのままconsumption of gasoline which contaminates environments became less とかかいたほうが文意に沿ってそうな。 二つしか理由を書いてないのに Because of all the reasons above, とall the reasons aboveですか....
>>606 まず、英語では同じ単語(car)を繰り返すのはよくない あとsell their carsとするのはやや変で、sell carsでいいんじゃないかね the car technologyのtheは不要、というか間違い
文字数稼ぎのためか、不要で不自然な繰り返しが多いが、不自然な部分に目をつぶって添削をすると、
I believe that the number of cars in cities should not be limited. There are two reasons. First, if the number of cars is limited, sales at automakers would plunge, damaging the broader economy. In addition, technology has been improving of late, so cars utilizes gasoline more efficiently than ever. Because of these reasons, the number of cars in cities should not be regulated.
Around where this thread began, English sentences were sequently written, which had me feel funny because the atomosphere there looked light and enjoyable. But from the middle Japanese language got to be used, and the share gradually increased as the day come close to the present. And, in the end, all posted sentences have written in Japanese. I cannot find anything interesting in what we’re written recently in this thread. Why are there anybody who regain the lightness and funniness which were there in the beginning of this thread?
Around where this thread began, English sentences were sequently written, which had me feel funny because the atomosphere there looked light and enjoyable. But from the middle Japanese language got to be used, and the share gradually increased as the day come close to the present. And, in the end, all posted sentences have written in Japanese. I cannot find anything interesting in what we’re written recently in this thread. Why are there anybody who regain the lightness and funniness which were there in the beginning of this thread?
>>604 I believe that the number of cars in cities should not be limited, and I have two reasons for this. Firstly, if the number of cars is limited, car companies may struggle to sell their vehicles, which would negatively impact the economy. Additionally, advancements in car technology have led to decreased fuel consumption.
Therefore, for all these reasons, I think that the number of cars in cities should not be limited.