英検１級エッセイ・２次対策専用スレッド

1 ：名無しさん＠英語勉強中：2015/03/27(金) 00:42:07.24 ID:Aj50GlQq.net

英検１級を目指す人が主に英語で意見してエッセイやスピーチの練習をするスレッドです。
TOPICSの提案は自由ですが時事的な問題など関心が高く良いと思います。
辞書、文法書の使用も良いと思います。
自信のない人は日本語や英日混在の文で書いても良いと思います。
反論、再反論も可。
文法ミスやBetter な表現など指摘しあいましょう。
その他常識の範囲で、また内容の真偽に関しては自己責任でお願いします。

2 ：名無しさん＠英語勉強中：2015/03/27(金) 08:39:31.70 ID:kSbpzAA4.net

Such a nice thread !!

3 ：名無しさん＠英語勉強中：2015/03/27(金) 19:05:34.96 ID:IRfxuWgJ.net

GJ!

4 ：名無しさん＠英語勉強中：2015/04/02(木) 20:03:52.59 ID:hD+5nH9J.net

エッセイ用に買った紫の洋書を無くしてしまった...
結構有名な本だったんだけど誰か知らない？

5 ：名無しさん＠英語勉強中：2015/04/02(木) 20:25:43.84 ID:/QsO0m9K.net

エスパーの方お願いします

6 ：名無しさん＠英語勉強中：2015/04/02(木) 21:17:45.34 ID:B+W6X8Y5.net

>>4
『Pros and Cons』かな？
紫といっても、ピンクに近い赤紫色の本だけど。

7 ：Omnipotent：2015/04/02(木) 22:00:12.45 ID:7kyOgpns.net

>>6
最新版は19th editionで表紙ブルーです。
その中で特に気に入ったフレーズは、
Individuals do not exist in a vacuum - we are all part of one organic society.

8 ：4：2015/04/02(木) 23:54:08.47 ID:hD+5nH9J.net

>>6
『Pros and Cons』ではないです
情報ありがとうございます

9 ：名無しさん＠英語勉強中：2015/04/03(金) 06:58:39.81 ID:/d3521la.net

ちょっと宜保愛子に聞いてくる。

10 ：名無しさん＠英語勉強中：2015/04/04(土) 00:55:45.62 ID:bWefJLgU.net

Let's start the ball rolling by introducing ourselves or exchaging some small talks
as with interview tests. What is your favorite pastime？　
I like riding a bycycle, watching TV or DVD videos.
My favorite programmes are dramas, baseball games, comedy shows.
Do you find rassunngorerai　is hilarious?

11 ：名無しさん＠英語勉強中：2015/04/17(金) 23:56:57.95 ID:anjzYKtU.net

過疎化してますな、というわけで燃料としてのネタを少なめに投下
120-150 wordsくらいで

1. Is modern technology making people less creative?
2. Is multiculturalism in society a good thing?
3. Are modern telecommunications creating a common world culture?
4. Healthcare: prevention versus cure
5. Can animal testing be justified?

12 ：名無しさん＠英語勉強中：2015/05/07(木) 18:06:03.83 ID:3TEfvszb.net

is your ass hole stinky?

13 ：性 ◆bKaGbR8Ka. ：2015/05/07(木) 18:46:28.28 ID:InMaqR4J.net

>>4 THE BIBLE IN BASIC ENGLISH

14 ：名無しさん＠英語勉強中：2015/05/08(金) 04:56:49.54 ID:mucLLlYb.net

ここコテハン必須の板だね。正しい指摘できる人がどれだけいるやら

15 ：名無しさん＠英語勉強中：2015/06/28(日) 23:37:35.13 ID:Y4GEQ/5h.net

age

16 ：名無しさん＠英語勉強中：2015/07/21(火) 09:12:13.53 ID:4rr3fUEs.net

今考えてる言葉遣いはこれ

A mirror for xx to be

xx は例えば our fuuture などが使われてる
テレビ CNNなどでも、よく聞くので使ってみようかなと思ってる

17 ：名無しさん＠英語勉強中：2016/01/12(火) 17:12:22.29 ID:5djEwEsP.net

普段ほとんで他人と話をしません。
おかげで、日常会話にもついていけなかったりします。
こんな私でも２次に合格できるでしょうか？

18 ：名無しさん＠英語勉強中：2016/01/13(水) 01:25:48.13 ID:vkZLPz92.net

あなたにだって、あなたのことを大切に思っている人が
きっといるはず。
大丈夫。がんばって。

19 ：名無しさん＠英語勉強中：2016/01/13(水) 19:16:07.00 ID:L5K6cPCU!.net

ヒッキーは英検受験の前にやることがあると思いまぁす！

20 ：名無しさん＠英語勉強中：2016/01/24(日) 15:37:49.97 ID:vFPstuVk.net

英検今日だろｗ

21 ：名無しさん＠英語勉強中：2016/02/06(土) 03:20:25.33 ID:sXYlMYTv.net

前回は旺文社の「14日でできる」の問題集の音読だけやってみて落ちた。
今回過去問の解答の音読もやって望む事にするよ。シャドーイングの他リッスンアンドリピートで長い文もそらで読めるまでやってる。
独学なんでやれる事の限界を感じるけど、今はそれならそれで出来そうな事だけやって再挑戦したい。

22 ：名無しさん＠英語勉強中 (ﾜｯﾁｮｲ 0392-iqWO)：2016/07/21(木) 21:53:45.53 ID:tJu5ndLd0.net

age

23 ：名無しさん＠英語勉強中 (ｻｻｸｯﾃﾛ Sp4d-xiH6)：2016/10/09(日) 16:46:02.28 ID:pQXHdzI2p.net

今回一次免除なんだが、CSEスコアって変動するのかな？
二次の合格点が変動するのかが気になるから
先達の意見を聞きたい。

24 ：名無しさん＠英語勉強中 ：2017/05/23(火) 16:02:36.51 ID:ZUMw5O8Yd.net

2次対策のために一番いい方法って結局なんだろうね。独学だったらモデルスピーチをシャドーイングしていくしかないん？

25 ：名無しさん＠英語勉強中 ：2017/05/23(火) 16:34:27.37 ID:apX9KQ2R0.net

>>24
スラスラ口から出てくるまで丸暗記。

26 ：名無しさん＠英語勉強中 ：2017/05/23(火) 16:47:18.08 ID:u0XYOpmL0.net

スピーチはどれくらい暗記したらいい？

27 ：名無しさん＠英語勉強中 ：2017/05/23(火) 22:14:45.34 ID:CN62N3Hx0.net

80個

28 ：名無しさん＠英語勉強中 ：2017/05/28(日) 20:54:28.06 ID:ealITRZod.net

>>11
1. Is modern technology making people less creative?

とりあえず、日本語で原案を。
英語もあげます。

創造性とは、新しい価値を生むことである。
新しい価値を生むにあたり、自分と向き合い、物事の基礎を積みかせねが大切である。
私は近代技術は人々を非創造的にしていると思う。近代技術の代表であるインターネットを人は安易に頼りすぎ、その創造の機会を失っている。
例えば、学生が論文を作るとき、インターネットの資料の一部をコピーして張り合わせて作る手法が散見されている。
これは、既にあるものをコピーしただけであり、彼らの価値観そのものだと思う。
これでは未来を担う若者は、社会を築く上で、創造性に欠けてしまう恐れがある。
以上の点で、近代技術は創造性を生まないと結論づける。

29 ：名無しさん＠英語勉強中 ：2017/05/28(日) 22:27:08.96 ID:ealITRZod.net

125 words.

こんな文でどうでしょう。

Creativity is the process of bringing new value into being. Creativity requires passion and commitment.
I believe modern technology is making people less creative.
Internet is the greatest achivement of any civilization. People rely on the internet for everything, whereas losing opportunties for being creative.
For example, there are some students who cheat on thier thesis.
They copy the sources from elsewhere online and put them togather as one piece of their own work.
This is nothing but plagiarism, reflecting their sense of values.
Our future lies with a generation of young people that can create a prosperous and equitable society. 
Being such uncriative, however, could ruin the bright future of the young.
As mentioned above, modern technology can bring anti-criativity to people.

30 ：名無しさん＠英語勉強中 ：2017/05/29(月) 20:08:01.03 ID:MMgNrkpGdNIKU.net

>>29
uncriative→uncreative
anti-criativity→anti-creativity

次行きます。指摘お願いしますね。

2. Is multiculturalism in society a good thing?

多文化主義は社会にとって良いものではないと思う。
確かに多文化主義は文化、民族の多様性を大事にしており、公平性などは民族自決主義の国よりは整備されていると思う。
一方で様々な弊害がある。
第一に、人間は自分と似た容姿の人しか意識的に安心しない点である。
そして、多文化主義の人々は自分と異なる文化で育った政治家を信用していない傾向にある。
それを裏付けるようにある研究では、多文化主義の国の公共費は、民族自決主義の国より低いことが示されている。
これでは社会の地盤が揺らいでしまう。
第ニに、民族自決主義の国とは異なり多文化主義の国はその国の一体感（愛国心など）が担保されない。
政治の梶取りひとつで、文化の境目や価値が 分断されてしまう恐れがある。
それにより、民族間でいざこざがあった場合、国を転覆しかねない危険性がある。
彼らはお互いに差別し、差別が憎しみを生むこともあるだろう。
以上のことから、多文化主義は社会にとって必ずしもいいものでないと主張する。

31 ：名無しさん＠英語勉強中 ：2017/05/29(月) 22:24:30.12 ID:MMgNrkpGdNIKU.net

>>30
と思ったが、難しすぎて歯が立たん。
頭悪いからwikiのコピペになる

32 ：名無しさん＠英語勉強中 ：2017/05/30(火) 19:47:01.90 ID:sgGB+F+pd.net

131words

I think multiculturalism in society is not a good thing. While politics of multiculturalism countries have maintained an ideal of equitable society, where co-existing cultures or races benignly influence one another, there lies flaws of multiculturalism.
First, we are comfortable around other people of similar appearance.
People of diverse communites don't trust a local mayor or the local paper who has a different cultual identity.
To support this fact, some study shows that relatively homogeneous societies invest more in public goods.
Multi-ethnic societies are, on the other hand, less charitable and less able to cooperate to develop public infrastructure.
Second, critics argues that multiculturalism encourage members of ethnic groups to look inward, and emphasizing the differences between groups rather than their shared rights.

33 ：名無しさん＠英語勉強中 ：2017/06/01(木) 09:03:16.19 ID:QcIpAzeXd.net

>>32
続き

If there is trouble between ethnic groups, there is danger of danger of disturbance throughout the country. The groups will disagree with each other, and disagreement may create hatred.
In conclusion, multiculturalism in societies dosen't affect a good thing.

34 ：名無しさん＠英語勉強中 ：2017/06/03(土) 15:49:35.44 ID:7n8p4GfQF.net

エッセイの練習用に過去問から
新形式適用で
200-240words
3 reasons or points
introduction, main body and conclusion

TOPIC：THE ADVANTAGES AND / OR DISADVANTAGES OF PUBLIC TRANSPORTATION

TOPIC： HOW BEST TO HANDLE CONFLICTS WITH OTHERS

TOPIC： MAKING THE WORLD SAFER FOR FUTURE GENERATIONS

TOPIC：SHOULD THERE BE MORE GOVERMENT CONTROL OF THE INTERNET?

TOPIC： DOES THE DEVELOPED WORLD HAVE A RESPONSIBILITY TO HELP DEVELPPING COUNTRIES OVERCOME POVERTY?

35 ：名無しさん＠英語勉強中 ：2017/06/08(木) 23:44:46.31 ID:S5hZFbXzd.net

>>34
Should there be more goverment control of the internet?

One of the most popular yet controversial innovations of technology is the internet.
Despite the benefits it offers, there are also setbacks that drive people push for and practice internet censorship.
I strongly agree with the idea that there should be more government control of the internet.

First of all, parents are not always be there watch out for children.
They have the responsibility to teach children about morality and guide them on what is good or bad but the truth is, they also have to earn a living to provide for their kids.
They do not have the capacity to be on watch on most parts of the day. That's one reason why we need internet censorship.

Another reason for proponents of internet censorship is that it can control illegal activities.
Supporters claim that regulating content in the internet is an effective way to lessen if not totally deter illegal activities because it keeps people from promoting malicious content which can easily influence others, if no regulations are imposed.

As internet we familiar with is a huge bank of data and valuable imformtion we need to access every single day, our government should control more of the internet in order to provide safety for us.

36 ：名無しさん＠英語勉強中 ：2017/06/09(金) 01:21:58.32 ID:eCKTnWs1d.net

アメリカの似通ったエッセイ見つけて構成しました。参考までに

TOPIC： DOES THE DEVELOPED WORLD HAVE A RESPONSIBILITY TO HELP DEVELPPING COUNTRIES OVERCOME POVERTY?

The developed countries should help the developing countries to live well by improving their health, education and trade.
Those three fundamentals are basic for developing countries to stand on themselves, so they can independently organize their own people in the future.

First, the health aspect, developing countries face dire problems.
Taking the African continent as an example, diseases such a malaria and AIDS are prevalent, resulting in thousands of deaths every year.
We can open free medical camps in the selected areas of poor countries. In this way free medical advice could be given.

Second, the eduction aspect, assistance in the field of education should be provided to the poorer nations.
The developed countries can provide funds to open new schools and polytechnic institutions.
These will not only increase the literacy rate, but will also provide vocational education.

Finally, rich nations should help to improve the economy of poor countries.
This can be done by promoting free trade.
This will reduce barriers to international trade such as tariffs, import quotas and export fees and will help to lift the developing countries out of poverty.

To conclude, if we want to live in a better world with peace and harmony, we should always help each other.
Therefore, I believe that richer nations have a responsibility to help the poor countries in all the fields.

37 ：名無しさん＠英語勉強中 ：2017/06/09(金) 07:14:22.18 ID:n8VwSmLv0.net

１級の過去問なんかよりよっぽどいいエッセイだなあ。

38 ：名無しさん＠英語勉強中 ：2017/06/11(日) 15:21:53.68 ID:WoGz15EU0.net

TOPIC： DOES THE DEVELOPED WORLD HAVE A RESPONSIBILITY TO HELP DEVELPPING COUNTRIES OVERCOME POVERTY?

こんなのどうかな？感想求む。

I think helping developing countries overcome poverty is one of the important missions of the developed world. I have two reasons to support my idea.

First, a tremendous amount of money needs to be poured into solving the problem of poverty in the world. It is rich countries’ responsibility to help the poor
through various means; OECD, grant aid, NGO support and so on. From humanitarian point of view, countries with money must do so to save people who are
dying from starvation, malnutrition and diseases that can be prevented by monetary aid and medical support.

Second, helping developing countries overcome poverty eventually leads to eradicating terrorism. Poverty is often cited as the cause of violence.
Those living in a wealthy country should put themselves in shoes of those living in poverty to understand how desperate they are. Can we blame those
who resort to violence in desperation who are given a choice between death from starvation and violence? With our help, whether it is monetary or technically,
they will be given hope. Hope is what people need to live in peace. Contributing to ease the world poverty will in turn lead to reducing the number of terrorist attacks.

For these reasons, I believe developed countries must help poor countries rise from poverty. We should start today to do our share of saving people in need.

39 ：名無しさん＠英語勉強中 ：2017/06/11(日) 15:24:38.44 ID:WoGz15EU0.net

↑あ、3つ理由がなくちゃダメなのね。

40 ：名無しさん＠英語勉強中 ：2017/06/11(日) 20:57:54.81 ID:QXVk40m6d.net

>>38
I think helping developing countries overcome poverty is one of the important missions of the developed world.
I have two reasons to support my idea.

First, a tremendous amount of money needs to be poured into solving the problem of poverty in the world.
→ pour into 名詞 が適切では？

be poured into funds to solve the problem of poverty in the world.

It is rich countries’ responsibility to help the poor through various means; OECD, grant aid, NGO support and so on.
→ ;
付加的な情報を加えるときは : が適切なのでは？

From humanitarian point of view, countries with money must do so to save people who are dying from starvation, malnutrition and diseases that can be prevented by monetary aid and medical support.

→ countries with money はpeople with money と違いググってもヒットしない表現。rich countries もしくは、 wealthy countries はいかが？
→ monetary aid and medical support はなんとなく or の方がいいかなぁとなんとなく思ったり

Second, helping developing countries overcome poverty eventually leads to eradicating terrorism.
Poverty is often cited as the cause of violence.
Those living in a wealthy country should put themselves in shoes of those living in poverty to understand how desperate they are.
Can we blame those who resort to violence in desperation who are given a choice between death from starvation and violence?
With our help, whether it is monetary or technically, they will be given hope.

41 ：名無しさん＠英語勉強中 ：2017/06/11(日) 20:59:14.71 ID:QXVk40m6d.net

>>40 の続き
Hope is what people need to live in peace. Contributing to ease the world poverty will in turn lead to reducing the number of terrorist attacks.
→ lead to reducing は lead to us reducing もしくは、 lead to reduce の方がいいような。

For these reasons, I believe developed countries must help poor countries rise from poverty. We should start today to do our share of saving people in need.

感想→230words前後かな、3つ目の理由を述べるために、2つ目の理由を削る必要があるかと思う。単語のミスもないし、理由も明確で表現もいいと思った。

指摘に間違いがあればよろしく

42 ：名無しさん＠英語勉強中 ：2017/06/11(日) 21:35:57.31 ID:WoGz15EU0.net

>>40 >>41 英文チェックありがとうございます。
＞→ pour into 名詞 が適切では？
poured into ...ingはOKのようです。
Billions of entrepreneurial dollars are being poured into solving humanity's death problem.
（2015/03/13 - Newsweek）などなど

＞付加的な情報を加えるときは : が適切なのでは？
はい、コロンのが適切ですね！Thanks.

＞countries with money は聞いたことがあったので使いました。下のような例文からして
「変」ということはないと思いますが、
したの１つめのように
countries with money and power としたらかっこいいと思いました。
ほかにも
countries with money to burn　なども見つかったので、使ってみたいです。

＞... we feel strongly that the way for life to ultimately change for poor Nicaraguans
is through in countries with money and power.

. Those individuals, organizations, and countries with money will be able to
use/abuse the law to their ...

＞monetary aid and medical support はなんとなく or の方が…
確かにand で二つをならべるというのも不自然ですね。

＞ｌead to reducing は lead to us reducing もしくは、 lead to reduce の方がいいような。
これはlead to reducing...でいいかと思います。たくさん例文がでてきます。

Our findings suggest that yoga exercise may lead to reducing the symptoms
of lower back pain （イギリスのヨガのサイト）

３つ目の理由を考えてちょっと直してきます！

43 ：名無しさん＠英語勉強中 ：2017/06/11(日) 22:07:04.11 ID:QXVk40m6d.net

>>42
なるほど、動名詞か文法駄目だな 笑

あと、prevented by monetary aid and medical supportの部分なんだけど
by と with の違いを検討してみたんだけど
どうかな？

44 ：名無しさん＠英語勉強中 ：2017/06/11(日) 22:12:25.49 ID:QXVk40m6d.net

あっなんでもない。
やっぱこのレベルの英文になると自爆するわ 笑

45 ：名無しさん＠英語勉強中 ：2017/06/11(日) 22:14:49.02 ID:WoGz15EU0.net

ご指摘ありがとうございました。理由３つにしました。
I think helping developing countries overcome poverty is one of the important missions of the developed world. I have three reasons to support my idea.

First, a tremendous amount of money and energy need to be poured into solving the problem of poverty in the world. It is rich countries’ responsibility
to help the poor through various means: OECD, grant aid, NGO support and so on. From humanitarian point of view, countries with money and power must
do so to save people who are dying from starvation, malnutrition and diseases that can be prevented by monetary or medical aid.

Second, helping developing countries overcome poverty may eventually lead to eradicating terrorism. Poverty is often cited as the cause of violence.
Those living in a wealthy country should understand how desperate those people are. With our help, whether it is monetary or technically, they will be given hope.
Hope is what people need to live in peace. Contributing to ease the world poverty will in turn lead to reducing the number of terrorist attacks.

Third, developed countries can donate money or send volunteer teachers to help children in developing countries receive formal education.
Educated children will grow into capable leaders who could someday get the nation out of poverty.

For these reasons, I believe developed countries must help poor countries rise from poverty.
We should start today to do our share of saving people in need.

(235 words)

46 ：名無しさん＠英語勉強中 ：2017/06/11(日) 22:30:51.73 ID:WoGz15EU0.net

真ん中あたり、

"whether it is monetary or technically, "

金銭援助でも技術援助でも　のつもりでしたが、形容詞と副詞で変なので、

"whether it is monetary aid or technical assistance"

と変えました。

47 ：名無しさん＠英語勉強中 ：2017/06/13(火) 23:32:45.45 ID:D+fbizG9M.net

こういうの見て英検で必要な速読を身に着けてるよ
TOEIC用だけど役立ってる
https://youtu.be/1KFemGNebnQ

48 ：名無しさん＠英語勉強中 ：2017/06/16(金) 19:43:19.46 ID:gYoZIXV3F.net

作文書く前のベースとして、基本動詞＋前置詞の勉強している。あとジャパンタイムズの英作文対策も購入した。さて、作文ブラシュアップするぞー

49 ：名無しさん＠英語勉強中 ：2017/06/18(日) 11:54:37.70 ID:zoS5jjAZF.net

参考書掘り出して纏めてみた。

エッセイの基本
Introduction
body 1
body 2
body 3
conclusion

語数制限-トータル200〜240words
Introductionとconclusionに50〜60words。bodyで各50〜60wordsを目安にするといい。

introductionにてトピックに対する自分のスタンスを入れるのがオーソドックス。
I think/believe 〜 should 〜.
I agree/disagree 〜.
また、その後に
I have three reasons to suppurt this idea.
などの表現も付け加えることも可能。

bodyの冒頭で使える表現
First〔First of all/The main reason 〜〕,Second, Third,
または、Second, Third, の代わりにFurthemore,
Moreover, Additionally, In addition, Yet another, Aside from 〜,
Next, Let's consider 〜, Another field〔erea/concern/problem〕〜, Finally, We also〜
などが使える。
※Firstly, Secondly, Thirdlyは敬遠するネイティヴがいる模様。しかし、Cambridge Dictionaryにおいてはより形式的な表現で使えるとある他、新聞等でもしばしば用いられている。

conclusionの冒頭で使える表現
In （my）conclusion,In summary, For the reasons listed 〔mentioned above〕, Considering 〔When considering/Based on/In light of〕the points mentioned above〔these issues〕,
Overall,Upon taking the above points into cosideration, The example mentioned above,

50 ：名無しさん＠英語勉強中 ：2017/06/18(日) 12:37:05.62 ID:zoS5jjAZF.net

punctuation
: コロン
1. 情報を列挙する時
-例
Topics discussed will include:  the structure of viruses, virus families and current concerns in virology.
2. 情報を説明、結論、付加する時
-例
Tai chi is more than a form of physical exercise: it is meditation in movement.
After extensive research, the committee came to its conclusion: development could not take place without further funding.

-ダッシュ
コロンと同じ

; セミコロン
1. 語句のリストを区切る
-例
The speakers were: Dr Sally Meadows, Biology; Dr Fred Eliot, Animal Welfare; Ms Gerri Taylor, Sociology; and Prof. Julie Briggs, Chemistry.
2. 2つの文を関連づける
-例
I read the book in one evening; it was not very helpful.
Personal writing utilises the first person form; impersonal writing utilises the third person form.
He was nervous about giving the speech; he asked for water several times.
The deadline has come forward a week; everyone's help will be needed.

3. 「別な方法では、しかし、従って」を使用する時
-例
I did not finish reading the text; instead, I watched the news.
(Notice that the connecting word instead is followed by a comma.)
The research is far from conclusive; nevertheless, it has some value in this case.
Dr Suptri argues that the research shows an increase in such occurrences; however, many experts would dispute this.

51 ：名無しさん＠英語勉強中 ：2017/06/18(日) 12:59:05.79 ID:zoS5jjAZF.net

あと、ここまで知ってたらマニアックだと思うけど一応

その他
「en ダッシュ」の使用例:
・期間を表現する場合（例：3−5 days, Monday−Thursday）
・複合語を作成し、分かれた一方の語が二単語の場合（例：a Nobel Prize−winning physicist）
・複合語を作成し、分かれた一方の語にすでにハイフンがある場合（例：an anti-American−leaning organization）
・方向、敵対、反対関係を意味する場合（例：the Austin−Dallas drive takes about three hours）
・二つの固有名詞の重要性が同等の場合の区切りとして使用される場合（例：the Mason−Dixon Line）

「em ダッシュ」の使用例:
・文の途中で挿入句を入れる場合（例：almost all the students―as many as 95%―failed the test)
・引用文の作者を入れる場合（例："Age cannot wither her, nor custom stale her infinit

52 ：名無しさん＠英語勉強中 (ﾆｸｸｴ Sd62-jmfR)：2017/06/29(木) 22:28:31.43 ID:7vWw2kCydNIKU.net

【TOPIC：Do the world's wilderness areas need to be better protected?】

Wilderness cleans our air and filter our water, without which Earth cannot sustain human beings. This clearly indicates that we must protect world's wilderness areas.
I have three reasons to support this idea.



First, Ecological Footprint has shown that our modern lifestyle exceeds the capacity of Earth by 30%; Japanese standard of living, In particular, by 130%. This is due to carbon emissions.
Thus, our planet needs more biocapacity to equalize this. Something has to be done.



Second, let's consider animals, experts claim that there are now roughly 17,000 species facing extinction around the world.
Some are directly caused by humans, for instance: black rhinos, for its precious hone; blue whale, for its valuable flesh.
Is this acceptable?



Lastly, ocean is another wilderness besides the ones on land.
One of the controversial matters among marine scientists is global marine pollution.
Did you know that approximately 1.4 billion pounds of trash per year enters the ocean? 


In summary, we are continuously becoming the burden of wilderness.
We need to take steps to solve these problems.

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53 ：名無しさん＠英語勉強中 (ｴﾑｿﾞﾈW FFff-AyKb)：2017/07/22(土) 11:18:25.60 ID:v5ThiiP8F.net

TOPIC：Should minors who commit serious crimes receive the same punishments as adults?

I believe that minors are too young to receive the same punishments as adults.
I have three reasons to support this idea.

The primary reason why minors shouldn't be punished is because the environment they grew up in deeply affects their way of thinking.
Hence, it is more likely that they may commit crimes if they were raised in a dysfunctional family. In most cases, they have witnessed domestic violence even in their neighborhood on a weekly basis.
Young minds can be easily shaped, thus if given proper guidance, they can make wise decisions in the future.

In addition, several studies show that the decision making part of the brain continues to develop until individual's mid-20's.
This means that juveniles delinquency account for immature brain function, providing the evidence that there should be extenuating circumstances in minors' crimes.
Adults should play a role model on how to behave in order to prevent them from poor decision making.

Last, unless we provide minor convicts proper education and ethical guidance giving a basis to develop a strong moral compass, the likelihood of their crime relapse will remain in high.
In fact, two third of former convicts are arrested again within three years after being released from imprisonment.

In light of points mentioned above, minors are too young to receive the same punishments as adults and most importantly it's them who will be taking the lead in supporting our societies after all.