英検一級スレ Part161

863 ：名無しさん＠英語勉強中 ：2018/02/16(金) 04:03:09.21 ID:PfOMoPdJ0.net

A certain fool wrote the following three sentences:

Your name is Altz. You cannot leave home because your permanent job is staying home.
You are working for Home Security Altz. You own this company.
You are the only customer of this company as well.

I commented on his remarks as follows:

Most of the above sentences you wrote begin with 'you' as if they were writen by schoolchildren
in the lower grades.
They are so awkward and offends my eyes, so I rewrote them as follows:
Everyone calls you Altz.
You can never go out because you have to work at home as a guard.
In the security company, you are not only the CEO but also the only customer.

What do you think about the fool?