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名無しさん＠英語勉強中

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>World is changing so fast that our country is not the exception for globalization.

so that 構文を使うほどの論理的つながりが2つの文にないと思います。

>The need for world safety is steadily growing, not to mention for our future generations.

not to mention forは前の文と対応してないと思います。
あと、何か導入の節があってもいいような
With the advance of globalizationとか

>This essay will touch upon three ereas regarding world safty issues.

touch uponが曖昧なので
This essay will discuss three things that our country can do for world safety
とかのほうがいいかも

>First of all, while many nations equip with neclear weapons, it is important for our goverment to be a roll model of non nuclear nation.

roll model はforな気がする
non-nuclear nationというのはなんか不自然

>We should stand up in principles to boost up the Treaty of Non-Proliferation of Neclear Weapons for future generations.

stand upがよく分からん。どういう意味ですか？